DIARY
You are so influencial
Caring things confidential
Diary of my being
Story that everlasting
My tanaga is all about my bestfriends who knows me inside and out and i refer them as my diary whom i can keep all the secrets a have.
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Influential, not influencial... Did you mean "carrying" for "caring things confidential"? The missing "is" in the last line sounds awkward. You don't have to stick with the English grammar, but not following it should not serve as a way for a poet to make his line fit a required meter, especially if it serves no other purpose...
ReplyDeleteTry to improve on this more, jeshca. The diary as a metaphor for your friends is nice. Perhaps, you can describe yourself writing on it, and how it relieves you of your sorrows and problems... How every blot of ink on a page becomes a fashionable glitter to the unseen reader who sees you for who you really are... Work on it more...